a pinkie-sized hole
from my arms getting heavy
or was that my bag?
(Is that too pared back to stand alone?)
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thin-haired fused shell
lacework of blood bubbles:
harrowed marrowed skull
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shiny vase
overloaded
with dust
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One Deep Breath: Container Prompt: Other responses
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Mike Mc
The third, and shortest, is the one that resonates first and best. I think I get the second, but not the first.
containers
IMHO, I have pretty much the same response as Mike. I am really drawn to the first ku, but wind up puzzled. The second is also “dense,” it is intriguing but ultimately I can’t get into the moment. The third is very here, very clear but maybe a bit too sparse. (I hesitate to ever say a ku is sparse as I tend to make my own as short as possible.
) But all three are enticing so I feel there’s a moment in each well worth sharing.
Roswila
I’m the anonymous second post above (of Roswila’s Dream & Poetry Realm). I didn’t realize (DUH!) my name would not show. Sorry.
The first one is odd and the second one spooky (but good). Interesting and diverse trio of poems. from Paris Parfait