Bleeding Hearts, One Single Impression
paths between centerpieces
suminagashi-combed scents
and sense of criss-crossings
here detergent, there
an angle from window
new degree, buds sticky opening
snowballs of pollen
fallen from the black tulip
trailing florals and vines
– ikebana pause
across tablecloths trails
lean forward, elbows
and back out walking
people disperse, sun
same cobblestone
as each yesterday
something new has opened
eyes were all periphery
find the small deep pink
move to center focus
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Gautami’s comment
I love the photo. And the words complement it too well!
ravages of time
Re: Gautami’s comment
Very nicely done. I especially liked the cobblestone line.
Vix
http://vixensden.com
I admit it – I had to look up the two words. *blush* Once I understood I could see it more clearly. Lovely poem Pearl.
Texasblu
http://texasblu5.blogspot.com/2008/05/one-single-impression-bleeding.html
from Quietpaths
Pearl, your poem is intriguing and unique. It is a work of art in progress, but… Tell me more about it because I want to understand better.
re
I meant to say: I perceive that the poem is about a work of art in progress…
Floral
This is a wonderfully meditative poem. I love how you draw attention outward and inward, varying the focus.
Pam at Amputated Moon
Omens
motion
I like all the motion,
becoming circular,
and focusing in
at the end.
Unusal to feel a
wind in a short.
Raven’s Comment
This is lovely and rich in motion, scent and color. I like the last two lines especially. Beautifully done. http://ravensviews.blogspot.com/2008/05/one-single-impression-bleeding.html
“combed scents” has me so intrigued. I love the vision of this (which is changing as I type). Very very nice poem!
http://meeyauw-pad.blogspot.com/2008/05/one-single-impression-bleeding.html
Sandy Calrson
“Move to center focus” is a lovely end to this visual tour of spring beauty. God bless.
sandycarlson.net
bleeding
I love the way you did this.
Re: re
you were closer the first time. it’s a draft.
it’s just describing the scents in a room crowded with people and conversations and walking outside to clear head of the clutter and centering on a single prevailing scent of a newly opened blossom.
I loved ‘sense of criss-crossings’ as it seems my own life does that quite often. I also enjoyed ‘snowballs of pollen fallen from the black tulip’ as this is often how I see through the eyes of my camera. Beautifully done.
bleeding hearts-osi
..the focus on a blossom on a prompt like ‘bleeding’ speaks of the many ways poetry would approach ideas or precepts and continue to jump happy surprises..thank u for the same..
http://horizonnext.blogspot.com/2008/05/bleeding-hearts.html